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The provided line graph demonstrates the proportion of the children who had low reading comprehension at the age of fifteen in four countries, Austria, Denmark, Ireland and Sweden.

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he provided line graph demonstrates the proportion of the children who had low reading comprehension at the age of fifteen in four countries, Austria, Denmark, Ireland and Sweden. Overall, it is clear that there were upward trend of the data on Austria, Ireland and Sweden, the opposite was true for the figure for Denmark. Additionally, it is notable that the percentage of children with low literacy in Austria was by far the largest during the research time. At the beginning of the year 2000, the proportion of children who were illiterate in Austria and Denmark stood at about 15% and 18% respectively. Over the following six years, there was a sharp increase to roughly 22% in the figure for children from Austria before reaching a peak of approximately 28% in 2009. By contrast, the data on Denmark has not stopped falling from around 17% to 15% between 2003 and 2009. Also in 2000, the proportion of teenagers from Sweden and Ireland were about 12. 5% and 11% correspondingly. The year 2003 saw a slow rise to 13% in the data on Sweden. After that, a significant climb to nearly 17% was seen in the figure for kids in Sweden in 2009. According to Ireland, the data remained constant in 2003, 11%; however, it grew gradually from 11% to 12% in 2006. Moreover, after three years, the percentage of group of 15-year-old with low literacy in Ireland leveled off at the same figure of Sweden, 17%.
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who had low reading comprehension at the age of fifteen in four countries, Austria, Denmark, Ireland and Sweden.

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that there were upward trend of the
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on Austria, Ireland and Sweden, the opposite was true for the
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for Denmark.
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, it is notable that the percentage of
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children
with low literacy in Austria was by far the largest during the research time.

At the beginning of the
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2000, the proportion of
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children
who were illiterate in Austria and Denmark stood at about 15% and 18%
respectively
. Over the following six years, there was a sharp increase to roughly 22% in the
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for
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from Austria
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reaching a peak of approximately 28% in 2009. By contrast, the
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on Denmark has not
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falling from around 17% to 15% between 2003 and 2009.

Also
in 2000, the proportion of
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teenagers
from Sweden and Ireland were about 12. 5% and 11%
correspondingly
. The
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2003
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a slow rise to 13% in the
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on Sweden. After that, a significant climb to
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in the
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for kids in Sweden in 2009. According to Ireland, the
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remained constant in 2003, 11%;
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with low literacy in Ireland leveled off at the same
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of Sweden, 17%.
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IELTS academic The provided line graph demonstrates the proportion of the children who had low reading comprehension at the age of fifteen in four countries, Austria, Denmark, Ireland and Sweden.

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