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The plans show a science park in two different time periods.

The plans show a science park in two different time periods. B71ea

The diagrams compare the variation of plans about the science park in two separate time periods between 2008 and today. Overall, To comparing the science park in the year of 2008 and in these days respectively, showed a various facilities updated and some are lost. In northwest part, the grasslands are eliminated to built for Research and development building. Likewise, in the northern part, the reception building which was below the offices are replaced by University Hub. Similarly, added some Cycle path beside the roads whereas Offices and Business units remain unchanged. In Southeast part, IT centre take the place to Innovation centre and added a Cycle path along Roadside. In the east part, build a Bus stop. Similarly, the place of Cyber security buildings are increased and Car park are quite decreased to sort out the Grassland.

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today
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Overall
, To comparing the science park in the year of 2008 and in these days respectively
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
 a various Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "facility"?facility
facilities
 updated and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
are lost
.

In northwest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsectorchunkanysharesectionfactor
part
, the grasslands are eliminated
 to built for Research and development building. Likewise
, in the northern You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsectorchunkanysharesectionfactor
part
, the reception building which was below the offices are replaced
 by University Hub. Similarly
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 Cycle path beside the roads whereas Offices and Business units remain unchanged.

In Southeast You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsectorchunkanysharesectionfactor
part
, IT Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
 take the place to Innovation Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
 a Cycle path along Roadside. In the east You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsectorchunkanysharesectionfactor
part
, build a Bus This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceasediscontinue
stop
. Similarly
, the place of Cyber security buildings are increased
 and Car park are quite decreased to sort out the Grassland. 

IELTS academic The plans show a science park in two different time periods.

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American English

4 paragraphs

138 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 5.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.5

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