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The pie charts below shows the portions of the foreign-born population of country A by continent of origin in 1971 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and ,make comparisons where releavent

The pie charts below shows the portions of the foreign-born population of country A by continent of origin in 1971 and 2011. KyY1R
The given pie charts illustrate the total percentage of poulation of various foreign nationalities situated in country A for the years of 1971 and 2011. It can be seen clearly that highest number of people born in country A was from Europe in the year of 1971 exactly 50% and after that very great difference accumulated for Asian people in the year of 2011 with total population of 45% which was more than 15 times double compared to year of 1971. During the year of 1971, portion of people of USA was around 10% which decreased to half in 2011. There were also a decline of more than double for British people which was 30% in 1971 to only 9% in 2011, but for African population this change was vice versa. Their population increased by double in 2011, from 4% in 1971 to 8% in country A. Incline of 8% can be seen for people of central and south America which were at 3% in 1971 to 11% in 2011, Only Oceanian public remain still around 1 to 2% for both the year of 1971 and 2011 and did not make vast variance during this 40year time period.
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poulation
of various foreign nationalities situated in country A for the years of 1971 and 2011.

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that highest number of
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people
born in country A was from Europe in the
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year
of 1971 exactly 50% and after that
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great difference accumulated for Asian
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people
in the
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year
of 2011 with total population of 45% which was more than 15 times double compared to
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year
of 1971.

During the
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of 1971, portion of
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people
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of USA
was around 10% which decreased to half in 2011. There were
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a decline of more than double for British
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people
which was 30% in 1971 to
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only
9% in 2011,
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for African population this
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was vice versa. Their population increased by double in 2011, from 4% in 1971 to 8% in country A.

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seen
for
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people
of central and
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south America
which were at 3% in 1971 to 11% in 2011,
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Only
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Oceanian
public remain
still
around 1 to 2% for both the
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year
of 1971 and 2011 and did not
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vast variance during this
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40year
time period.

IELTS academic The pie charts below shows the portions of the foreign-born population of country A by continent of origin in 1971 and 2011.

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