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diagram illustrates the step-by-step process involved in the manufacturing of bricks

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The diagram illustrates the step-by-step process involved in the manufacturing of bricks using machinery. Overall, the process requires seven consecutive steps for the production of bricks. Raw materials required for brick manufacturing are clay, sand and water, which are then processed through several machines at different stages to make the bricks ready to deliver. At first stage, the clay used for making the bricks is excavated from the earth using a large digging machine. This clay has to undergo a refining process through a metal grid; during this stage the lumps of clay are refined to finer clay particles for the next step. In the following stage, sand and water are added to the clay in order to make it sturdy and mouldable into proper shape. The consecutive step is moulding, which can be executed through two different steps, either by putting it into a machine with a wire cutter or through putting the raw material into a pre-shaped mould. The resulting moulded blocks of bricks are fragile and moist; hence, they must be dried before send them for baking. It takes around 1-2 days to evaporate the moisture. Once the raw blocks are dried they are placed in the kiln, firstly at a moderate temperature of 200 – 900 degree C, later to 1300 degree C maximum. As the resulting product is now too hot to handle it is allowed to cool into a cooling chamber
The diagram illustrates the step-by-step process involved in the manufacturing of
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bricks
using machinery.

Overall
, the process requires seven consecutive
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steps
for the production of
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bricks
. Raw materials required for brick

manufacturing are
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clay
, sand and water, which are then processed
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through
several machines at
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different
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stages
to

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make
the
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bricks
ready to deliver.

At
first
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stage
, the
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clay
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used
for making the
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bricks
is excavated
from the earth using a large digging machine. This

clay
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has to
undergo a refining process
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through
a metal grid; during this
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stage
the lumps of
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clay
are refined
to finer

clay particles for the
next
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step
. In the following
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stage
, sand and water are
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added
to the
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clay
in order to
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make
it

sturdy and
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mouldable
into proper shape. The consecutive
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step
is
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moulding
, which can
be executed
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through
two

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different
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steps
, either by putting it into a machine with a wire cutter or
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through
putting the raw material into a

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pre-shaped
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mould
. The resulting
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moulded
blocks of
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bricks
are fragile and moist;
hence
, they
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must
be dried
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before


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send
them for baking. It takes around 1-2 days to evaporate the moisture.

Once the raw blocks
are dried
they
are placed
in the kiln,
firstly
at a moderate temperature of 200 – 900 degree C,

later to 1300 degree C maximum. As the resulting product is
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now
too hot to handle it is
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allowed
to cool into a

cooling
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chamber
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IELTS academic diagram illustrates the step-by-step process involved in the manufacturing of bricks

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
236 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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