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The provided graph details the mean temperature of 3 cities within 1 year.

The provided graph details the mean temperature of 3 cities within 1 year. yDgLE
The provided graph details the mean temperature of 3 cities within 1 year. Overall, there is a fluctuation in the temperature of 3 cities; both Paris and Boston peak in the mid-year period, while Melbourne follows an opposite trend. Looking at Boston, in January, it has the lowest temperature of the 3 cities with only under 5 degrees. It then starts to rapidly rise, overtake Paris and Melbourne in the second half of April, and reach the top of almost 35 degrees in August, the highest temperature of all cities observed in any month. From this point, Boston becomes cooler quickly and drops to precisely 5 degrees this December, the lowest of 3 cities in that month. Similarly, Paris, commencing at about 8 degrees, also climbs up to the apex of beneath 25 degrees in July. Afterward, the city’s temperature remains the same in one month before plummeting to roughly 10 degrees in December. Conversely, Melbourne registers an intriguing trend as its starting point is above 25 degrees, which is way higher than the other cities. Instead of going up, Melbourne slowly declines and bottomed out at over 15 degrees in July. At this moment, the city warms up and leads the data in December with the same temperature as that of January.
The provided graph
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details
the mean
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temperature
of 3
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cities
within 1 year.

Overall
, there is a fluctuation in the
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temperature
of 3
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cities
; both Paris and Boston peak in the mid-year period, while Melbourne follows an opposite trend.

Looking at Boston, in January, it has the lowest
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temperature
of the 3
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cities
with
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only
under 5
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degrees
. It then
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starts
to
rapidly
rise, overtake Paris and Melbourne in the second half of April, and reach the top of almost 35
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degrees
in August, the highest
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temperature
of all
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cities
observed in any month. From this point, Boston becomes cooler
quickly
and drops to
precisely
5
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degrees
this December, the lowest of 3
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cities
in that month.
Similarly
, Paris, commencing at about 8
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degrees
,
also
climbs up to the apex of beneath 25
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degrees
in July. Afterward, the city’s
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temperature
remains the same in one month
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before
plummeting to roughly 10
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degrees
in December.

Conversely
, Melbourne registers an intriguing trend as its starting point is above 25
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degrees
, which is way higher than the other
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cities
.
Instead
of going up, Melbourne
slowly
declines and bottomed out at over 15
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degrees
in July. At this moment, the city warms up and leads the data in December with the same
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temperature
as that of January.
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