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The Provided diagram illustrates the participation of young learners with three Games such as Soccer, Cricket, Basket ball and Categories are splitted up based on the Level of class which they are belong to.

The Provided diagram illustrates the participation of young learners with three Games such as Soccer, Cricket, Basket ball and Categories are splitted up based on the Level of class which they are belong to. Overall, The Cricket shows the decreasing trend with the number of students through out all the standards on the contrary rest of the games are possessed more involvement by them and it increased drastically. The Grade eight students are participated in huge amount with a 55 percent which is ten times smaller than Grade nine followed by five more percent decreased with forty percent by tenth grade students. On the other hand, The games such as soccer as well as basket ball are played by the most of the them and showcased with five percent surge up with number of players from class eight and Tenth. Besides, The Players of basket ball from class Ninth, eight grade players of the soccer are lies over same constant value of Twenty five percent.
The Provided diagram illustrates the participation of young learners with three Games such as Soccer, Cricket, Basket ball and Categories are
The past tense and past participle of the verb “to split” is “split”. Alternatively you could use “separated” or “divided”.
splitted
up based on the Level of
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class
which they are
Consider using either the past participle “belonged” or the present participle “belonging” here.
belong
to.

Overall
, The Cricket
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shows
the decreasing trend with the number of students
Did you mean “throughout”?
through out
all the standards
on the contrary


rest of the games
are possessed
more involvement by
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them and
it increased
drastically
.

The
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Grade
eight students
are participated
in huge amount with a 55
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percent
which is ten times smaller than
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Grade
nine followed by five more
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percent
decreased with forty
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percent
by tenth
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grade
students.

On the other hand
, The games such as soccer
as well
as basket ball
are played
by the most of
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the them
and showcased with five percent

surge up with number of players from
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class
eight and Tenth.
Besides
, The Players of basket ball from
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class
Ninth, eight
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grade
players of the soccer are lies over same constant value of Twenty five
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percent
.
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IELTS academic The Provided diagram illustrates the participation of young learners with three Games such as Soccer, Cricket, Basket ball and Categories are splitted up based on the Level of class which they are belong to.

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165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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