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The bar graph compares the percentages of people, who visited four various places in Canada.

The bar graph compares the percentages of people, who visited four various places in Canada. Overall, it is clear that cinema is the most popular place for three group of people, who living in Canada. However, theatre, which is the least attractive place for Canadian people. In terms of native canadian, favourite place is cinema where 70% of people visited, which is the highest, while the least proportion of native canadian visited 20% in theatre. Library and zoo where around 35% and 43% people visited respectively. However, almost 65% of English speaking countries people visited highest in cinema. People visited library and zoo 40% and 50% respectively. Whereas, theatre, where the least percentages of English speaking countries people visited around 25%. Non speaking countries people visited most in
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in Canada.

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, it is
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that cinema is the most popular
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place
for three
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of
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people
, who living in Canada.
However
,
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theatre
, which is the least attractive
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place
for Canadian
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people
.

In terms of native
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canadian
,
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favourite
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place
is cinema where 70% of
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people
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visited
, which is the highest, while the least proportion of native
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canadian
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visited
20% in
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theatre
. Library and zoo where around 35% and 43%
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people
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visited
respectively
.
However
, almost 65% of
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English speaking
countries
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people
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visited
highest in cinema.
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People
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visited
library and zoo 40% and 50%
respectively
. Whereas,
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theatre
, where the least percentages of
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countries
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people
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visited
around 25%.

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most in

IELTS academic The bar graph compares the percentages of people, who visited four various places in Canada.

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