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The provided bar graph illustrates the percentage of males and females who took part in manifold sports in the UK in the year 2008.

The provided bar graph illustrates the percentage of males and females who took part in manifold sports in the UK in the year 2008. 7P5Kb
The provided bar graph illustrates the percentage of males and females who took part in manifold sports in the UK in the year 2008. At the first glance, it can be seen from the chart that what stands out most was netball - the sport which had the greatest participation of females, while the figures for males who relished in soccer was the highest. Similarly, there was an equal proportion of boys and girls enjoying tennis in tandem basketball. The percent of males who were interested in soccer at about 25%, whereas females only accounted for five percent of this object. Likewise, Other sport stood at the second place, around 20% of masculine gender were impressed which doubled that of females (about 10%). Meanwhile, there was a significant sport called cricket, the rate of gentlemen who played this sport was 10% as opposed to the opposite sex playing (under 5%). Table tennis was appreciated by males, which was a higher proportion than females. Conversely, the figures of females who played netball were consistently high at 25% as against the proportion of males ones. Furthermore, there was a large difference in the percentage of swimming between males and females. Nonetheless, the proportion of both boys and girls who participated in tennis as well as basketball was witnessed as the similar ratio. Besides, jogging was considered as the least infatuation in both males and the opposite sex.
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who
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took part
in manifold
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sports
in the UK in the year 2008.

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first
glance, it can be
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seen
from the chart that what stands out most was netball
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-
the
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sport
which had the greatest participation of
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females
, while the figures for
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males
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who
relished in soccer was the highest.
Similarly
, there was an equal
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proportion
of boys and girls enjoying tennis in tandem basketball.

The percent of
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males
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who
were interested
in soccer at about 25%, whereas
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females
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only
accounted for five percent of this object.
Likewise
, Other
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sport
stood at the second place, around 20% of masculine gender
were impressed
which doubled that of
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females
(about 10%). Meanwhile, there was a significant
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sport
called cricket, the rate of gentlemen
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who
played this
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sport
was 10% as opposed to the opposite sex playing (under 5%). Table tennis
was appreciated
by
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males
, which was a higher
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proportion
than females.

Conversely
, the figures of
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females
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who
played netball were
consistently
high at 25% as against the
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proportion
of
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males
ones.
Furthermore
, there was a large difference in the percentage of swimming between
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males
and
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females
. Nonetheless, the
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proportion
of both boys and girls
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who
participated in tennis
as well
as basketball
was witnessed
as the similar ratio.
Besides
, jogging
was considered
as the least infatuation in both
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males
and the opposite sex.
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IELTS academic The provided bar graph illustrates the percentage of males and females who took part in manifold sports in the UK in the year 2008.

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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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