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The provided bar chart illustrates the main volume of rain for twelve months while the line graph depicts the regional degree of East Africa.

The provided bar chart illustrates the main volume of rain for twelve months while the line graph depicts the regional degree of East Africa. mbyY8
The provided bar chart illustrates the main volume of rain for twelve months while the line graph depicts the regional degree of East Africa. In general, July witnesses the lowest figure in both temperature and rainfall among other months. From that, it can be seen that in this area around the middle of the year, the weather was relatively dry and cool. As can be seen from the bar chart, in the first months of the year, there was the proliferation of the rain fall. The figure in January and April are 25mm and 275mm, respectively. In the opposite tendency, at the end of the year, the amount of rain seem to be insignificant change within 150mm in October and November. In addition, the smallest gap is to be seen in the rainfall in July, which is only about 10mm. Although this region is in close proximity to the equator, the temperature is not too hot. March has the highest degree but still less than 30 degree. Moreover, the plummet is experienced in the period of five months starting from March to July, with 27 degree for the former compared to 17 degree for the last. On the other hand, October undergo the second highest temperature in comparison with March, about 26 degree.
The provided bar chart illustrates the main volume of rain for twelve
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months
while the line graph depicts the regional
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degree
of East Africa.

In general
, July witnesses the lowest figure in both temperature and rainfall among other
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months
. From that, it can be
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seen
that in this area around the middle of the year, the weather was
relatively
dry and cool.

As can be
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seen
from the bar chart, in the
first
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months
of the year, there was the proliferation of the rain fall. The figure in January and April are
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25mm
and
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275mm
,
respectively
. In the opposite tendency, at the
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end
of the year, the amount of rain seem to be insignificant
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change
within
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150mm
in October and November.
In addition
, the smallest gap is to be
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seen
in the rainfall in July, which is
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only
about
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10mm
.

Although this region is in
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close proximity
to the equator, the temperature is not too hot. March has the highest
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degree
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but
still
less than 30
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degree
.
Moreover
, the plummet
is experienced
in the period of five
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months
starting from March to July, with 27
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degree
for the former compared to 17
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degree
for the last.
On the other hand
, October
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undergo
the second highest temperature
in comparison
with March, about 26
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degree
.
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IELTS academic The provided bar chart illustrates the main volume of rain for twelve months while the line graph depicts the regional degree of East Africa.

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