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The provided bar chart describes the data of one country’s exports in different sectors in 2015 and 2016, and also the below table explains the variation in each region during export in 2016 when it is matched to 2015.

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The provided bar chart describes the data of one country’s exports in different sectors in 2015 and 2016, and also the below table explains the variation in each region during export in 2016 when it is matched to 2015. The X-axis represents different product categories while the Y-axis represents a volume in billion dollars. The country is exporting things like Petroleum products, Engineered goods, Gems and jewellery, Agricultural products, and Textiles. In 2015 they transported around 61 billion dollars of petroleum products, but in 2016 it was raised to 63 billion dollars. In engineered goods, we can see that around 8. 5% billion dollars grow in export, which was increased from 57 to nearly 62 billion dollars. In 2015 they shipped 43 billion dollars of Gems and jewellery, but next year it was fallen by 5. 18% that is around 41 billion dollars. In the agricultural sector, around 31 billion dollars of export took place in 2015, but in 2016 it was gone up by a tiny proportion. In the textile field, they shipped around 25 billion dollars of goods in 2015, but in 2016 it was raised by 15. 24% that is around 29 billion dollars. The county’s exports have been grown up in all sectors except Gems and jewellery.
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products
, Engineered
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goods
, Gems and
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jewellery
, Agricultural
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transported
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61
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of petroleum
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,
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. In engineered
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goods
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around
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grow in
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shipped 43
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of Gems and
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jewellery
,
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. In the agricultural sector,
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31
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of
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took place in 2015,
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in 2016 it
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in 2015,
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The county’s
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jewellery
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IELTS academic The provided bar chart describes the data of one country’s exports in different sectors in 2015 and 2016, and also the below table explains the variation in each region during export in 2016 when it is matched to 2015.

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