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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. 3yQl
The given bar graph depicts the various levels of post school education in the Australia and average of male and female in year 1999. The given data was caliberated in percentile. Moving towards chart, there were sixty percent of men who have masters degree and fourty percentile of women with same field. There were 70 proportional of gents and thirty percentage of ladies had postgraduates diploma. There were more than fifty proportion of ratio of males and females were in graduate degree. There were maximum percentage of women with approximately seven percentile of males in skilled vocational diploma which were the maximum as compared with other and only ten proportional ratio of female in post school qualification. overall, the chart illustrates the different streams of school in Australia. In which the skilled vocational diploma were plethora of male students
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bar graph depicts the various levels of post school education in the Australia and average of male and female in year 1999. The
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data was
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in percentile.

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degree and
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fourty
percentile of women with same field. There were 70 proportional of gents and thirty percentage of ladies had postgraduates diploma. There were more than fifty proportion of ratio of
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males
and females were in graduate degree.

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were maximum percentage of women with approximately seven
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of
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males
in skilled vocational diploma which were the maximum as compared with other and
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only
ten proportional
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of female in post school qualification.

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overall
, the chart illustrates the
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streams of school in Australia. In which the skilled vocational diploma were plethora of male
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students

IELTS academic The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

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