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The given illustration depicts the post-graduation qualification of Australian male and female in 1999.

The given illustration depicts the post-graduation qualification of Australian male and female in 1999. EPxx
The given illustration depicts the post-graduation qualification of Australian male and female in 1999. As is observed, female were more in numbers in case of undergraduate diploma and bachelor degree while male outnumbered female in all other levels. In this chart, almost 90% of males are having the skilled vocational diploma, while only approximately 10% of females are having the same qualifications. In contrast, nearly 70% of women obtain the qualifications of undergraduate diploma, which the number is twice larger than the number of males. However, the percentages of females and males who graduate from universities are similar, which are around 55% and 45%, respectively. After getting a degree or diploma in the universities or colleges, it seems that males prefer to keep enhancing their knowledge or skills in schools. The chart also indicates that no matter postgraduate diploma or master’s degree, more males are likely to study for. Near 70% of males are holding the postgraduate diploma and 60% men graduated from graduate programs. For females, only 30% have already studied for obtaining the qualification of a Postgraduate Diploma. For the master’s degree, 40% of women already hold the qualifications
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illustration depicts the post-graduation
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qualification
of Australian male and
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female
in 1999. As
is observed
,
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female
were more in numbers in case of undergraduate
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diploma
and bachelor
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degree
while male outnumbered
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female
in all other levels.

In this chart, almost 90% of
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males
are having the skilled vocational
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diploma
, while
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only
approximately 10% of
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females
are having the same
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qualifications
.
In contrast
,
nearly
70% of women obtain the
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qualifications
of undergraduate
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diploma
, which the number is twice larger than the number of
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males
.
However
, the percentages of
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females
and
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males
who graduate from universities are similar, which are around 55% and 45%,
respectively
. After getting a
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degree
or
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diploma
in the universities or colleges, it seems that
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males
prefer to
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keep
enhancing their knowledge or
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skills
in schools. The chart
also
indicates that no matter postgraduate
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diploma
or master’s
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degree
, more
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males
are likely to study for. Near 70% of
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males
are holding the postgraduate
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diploma
and 60%
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men
graduated from graduate programs. For
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females
,
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only
30% have already studied for obtaining the
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qualification
of a Postgraduate
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Diploma
. For the master’s
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degree
, 40% of women already hold the
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qualifications
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IELTS academic The given illustration depicts the post-graduation qualification of Australian male and female in 1999.

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2 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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