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The provided bar chart depicts the information about the Australian children play the four diffrent types of games it's, swimming, football, netball and basketball in 2014. The data has been calibrated in percentage. ed in

The provided bar chart depicts the information about the Australian children play the four diffrent types of games it's, swimming, football, netball and basketball in 2014. The data has been calibrated in percentage. ed in k5nA2
At is persented in the chart that, The boys participation in sports approximately 13% in swimming. However, The contribution Australian girls in sports ratio around 16% in the same activity in 2014. While, the football play the Australian boys percentage was 20%. Movingfurther, The percentage of 3% in the same curricular activity doing the Australian girls. furthermore, In 2014 take part in sports activity of Australian girls and boys percentage roughly 3 to 18% in netball. Meanwhile, during the same year was basketball boys participation discrese as cpmpare to girls activities in basketball. Overall, It is clearly seen that the highest percentage of football players whereas, the least participation of netball.
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participation in sports approximately 13% in swimming.
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, The contribution Australian
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girls
in sports ratio around 16% in the same
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activity
in 2014.
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boys
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percentage
was 20%.
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, The
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of 3% in the same curricular
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activity
doing the Australian
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girls
.
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, In 2014
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take part
in sports
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activity
of Australian
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girls
and
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boys
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percentage
roughly 3 to 18% in netball. Meanwhile, during the same year was basketball
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boys
participation
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discrese
as
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cpmpare
to
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girls
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activities
in basketball.
Overall
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clearly
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that the highest
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of football players whereas, the least participation of netball.
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IELTS academic The provided bar chart depicts the information about the Australian children play the four diffrent types of games it's, swimming, football, netball and basketball in 2014. The data has been calibrated in percentage. ed in

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