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the proportion of fish and some other meat were consumed

the proportion of fish and some other meat were consumed AJgEM

The line graph illustrates how much fish and several kinds of meat were eaten in a particular European country during a period of 25 years (1979-2004). Overall, l consumption of fish and meat saw downward trends across the board, except for chicken. Fish, in addition to accounting for a small portion of people’s diet at the start of the period, remained the least popular food for the remainder of the years. In 1979, consumption of Beef and Lamb stood at 220 and 150 grams per capita per week respectively. They were alike in that their amount halve during the scenario period, ending at 110 grams for Beef and 70 grams for Lamb. However both of them experienced lots of ups and downs during this 25-year period. Fish was consumed about 65 grams by each individual per week in 1979. In comparison with others, it approximately remained constant until 2004, reaching just below 50 grams. On the other hand, chicken stood at 140 grams and rose considerably by 110 grams per person over the following 25 years, making it the number one food eaten in 2004.

The line graph illustrates how much fish and several kinds of meat were eaten
 in a particular European country during a period of 25 years (1979-2004).

Overall
, l consumption of fish and meat This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 downward trends across the board, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :with the exception of
except for
 chicken. Fish, in addition
 to accounting for a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 portion of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
’s diet at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 of the period, remained the least popular food for the remainder of the years.

In 1979, consumption of Beef and Lamb stood at 220 and 150 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmatriarchancestorgrannygrandma
grams
 per capita per week respectively
. They were alike in that their amount halve during the scenario period, ending at 110 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmatriarchancestorgrannygrandma
grams
 for Beef and 70 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmatriarchancestorgrannygrandma
grams
 for Lamb. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 both of them experienced lots of ups and downs during this 25-year period.

Fish was consumed
 about 65 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmatriarchancestorgrannygrandma
grams
 by each individual per week in 1979. In comparison
 with others, it approximately remained constant until 2004, reaching This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 below 50 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmatriarchancestorgrannygrandma
grams
. On the other hand
, chicken stood at 140 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmatriarchancestorgrannygrandma
grams
 and rose considerably
 by 110 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmatriarchancestorgrannygrandma
grams
 per person over the following 25 years, making it the number one food eaten in 2004. 