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The process of manufacturing cherry jam is demonstrated by the diagram.

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The process of manufacturing cherry jam is demonstrated by the diagram. Overall, this process includes 9 stages, commencing with collecting cherries from cherry trees and finishing with sticking labels on jars. Firstly, a sheet is spread on the ground and the tree is shaken to get the cherries. In the next step, they are collected and are transferred to the processing plant. Then leaves and stems are removed from the cherries before they are washed by water. After that, stones are take out of the middle of the cherries. Next, the cherries are cooked and extra ingredients such as lemon juice, sugar and pectin are added. When the cooking is done, the cherry jam will be checked for quality. In the final stages, the jam is put into the jars, and the labels are stuck on the jars.

The process of manufacturing cherry jam is demonstrated
 by the diagram.

Overall
, this process includes 9 stages, commencing with collecting You use this word too often, consider replacing it withroseflamingmaroonglowingcardinalcrimson
cherries
 from cherry trees and finishing with sticking labels on jars.

Firstly
, a sheet is spread
 on the ground and the tree is shaken
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withroseflamingmaroonglowingcardinalcrimson
cherries
. In the next
 step, they are collected
 and are transferred
 to the processing plant. Then This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departs
leaves
 and stems are removed
 from the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withroseflamingmaroonglowingcardinalcrimson
cherries
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 they are washed
 by water. After that, stones are take out of the middle of the cherries.

Next
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withroseflamingmaroonglowingcardinalcrimson
cherries
are cooked
 and extra ingredients such as lemon juice, sugar and pectin are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
. When the cooking is done
, the cherry jam will be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitored
checked
 for quality. In the final stages, the jam is put
 into the jars, and the labels are stuck
 on the jars. 

IELTS academic The process of manufacturing cherry jam is demonstrated by the diagram.

Academic

American English

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138 words

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