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The process illustrates about the evolution

The process illustrates about the evolution 8GA0m
The process illustrates about the evolution of the horse about a period of 40 million years and this development of horse had four stages in total. A cursory glance at the process is adequate enough to show the vital changes in its foot and size. Horse is the modern name of this animal and there are four stages in its evolution. At the first stage, 40 million years ago, the name of horse was Eohippus, which was smaller in size and its foot had four fingers. In the second stage, 30 million years before, the name of the horse was Mesohippus. Many changes have occurred in its shape and foot. The foot consists of three fingers and the shape was almost doubled. Further looking at the process, it is clear that 15 million years before the name of the horse was Mcrychippus, which was even larger in size and it also had thicker fur and longer tail. The change in its foot has made it stronger. In its foot the middle bone was bigger and moved front. At the last stage, the modern horse is different in all aspects. The foot has three joints and at bottom it has formed a toe. Due to the major changes in its foot, it can run fast. Overall, tremendous changes occurred to the modern horse throughout its evolution, with a special focus on its foot structure.
The process illustrates about the evolution of the
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had four
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is the modern
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of this animal and there are four
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in its evolution. At the
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Eohippus
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smaller in size
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have occurred in its shape and foot. The foot consists of three fingers and the shape was almost doubled.

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larger in size
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in its foot has made it stronger. In its foot the middle bone was bigger and
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, the modern
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in its foot, it can run
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occurred to the modern
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throughout its evolution, with a special focus on its foot structure.
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