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Lincraft Shooter changes in population of animal breed in in 2011 to 2016 in the literal places of North America

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The given graph illustrates the changes in population of wildlife field in between 2011 to 2016 in the littorall places of North America. The data has been calibrated in thousands and percentageOverall, graph of bears showed an upward trend over the period. However the bears are most protected species by authoritiesIt is crystal clear from the line graph, from the beginning to ending the population of abears increased continuously and reached as to nearly 200 thousand. Alternatively, the populace of whales showed fluctuations over the period and from 2011 to 2016 the amount of populace was same as nearly 75 thousands. Further the graph of dolphins was decreased continuously from 150 to 0 thousands in given time periodProbing further 65% amount has been spent on the bears to protect them while only 30% money has been spent to save whales and for protection of whales authority has utilised 5% money
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,
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of bears
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an upward trend over the period.
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is crystal
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, from the beginning to ending the population of
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abears
increased
continuously
and reached as to
nearly
200 thousand.
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, the populace of whales
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showed
fluctuations over the period and from 2011 to 2016 the amount of populace was same as
nearly
75 thousands.
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the
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graph
of dolphins
was decreased
continuously
from 150 to 0 thousands in
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periodProbing
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65% amount has
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on the bears to protect them while
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only
30% money has
been spent
to save whales and for protection of whales authority has
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utilised
5%
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money

IELTS academic Lincraft Shooter changes in population of animal breed in in 2011 to 2016 in the literal places of North America

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