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The presented line graph shows data about sales of gold in Dirhams between January to December in 2002.

The presented line graph shows data about sales of gold in Dirhams between January to December in 2002. 2lkLX
The presented line graph shows data about sales of gold in Dirhams between January to December in 2002. It can be clearly seen that March was the most profitable month than any other month. Over the next four months, the line fell down and reached the lowest point of none sales. At the beginning of year, the sellings of Dirhams began from 200 million. From February to March the line considerably climbed and hit to bottom out at 350 million. Nevertheless, during the next four months from April to July, the sales were gradually going down by 240 million. Despite the fact that after loss in August the sellings rapidly increased to 210 million, the line dropped to 120 million again as it was in July. In October the sellings were climbed significantly. Finally, over the period from October to December, the sales remain the same over 180 million.
The presented
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shows
data about sales of gold in
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Dirhams
between January to December in 2002. It can be
clearly
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seen
that March was the most profitable
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month
than any other
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month
. Over the
next
four
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months
, the
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line
fell down and reached the lowest point of none sales.

At the beginning of year, the
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sellings
of
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Dirhams
began from 200
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million
. From February to March the
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line
considerably
climbed and hit to bottom out at 350
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million
.
Nevertheless
, during the
next
four
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months
from April to July, the sales were
gradually
going down by 240 million.

Despite the fact that after loss in August the
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sellings
rapidly
increased to 210
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million
, the
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line
dropped to 120
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million
again as it was in July. In October the
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sellings
were climbed
significantly
.
Finally
, over the period from October to December, the sales remain the same over 180
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million
.
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IELTS academic The presented line graph shows data about sales of gold in Dirhams between January to December in 2002.

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