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The presented diagram vividly demonstrates the process of recycling mobile phones.

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The presented diagram vividly demonstrates the process of recycling mobile phones. Latter to a short glance, it is easy to identify that the first deviation of path occurs at storages. While this story can come to a short end if their components are destined to be resold, it also can to distance. At this juncture, phones get stripped off their batteries and get delivered to various companies. Afterward, they undergo the process of dismantling and separation via magnetic and mechanical means. Firstly, the metal parts and wiring boards get assessed with the aim of refining the precious metals they might include other than copper, which in its case, get smelted and all material altogether get reused. Secondly, the plastic remains might get reprocessed into lower class plastics or get incinerated as an alternative source of energy. It is noteworthy that there are other materials that their purpose or course of action are not showcased here.
The presented diagram
vividly
demonstrates the process of recycling mobile phones.

Latter to a short glance, it is easy to identify that the
first
deviation of path occurs at
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storages
. While this story can
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come
to a short
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if their components
are destined
to be resold, it
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to distance. At this juncture, phones
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get
stripped off their batteries and
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get
delivered to various
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companies
.

Afterward, they undergo the process of dismantling and separation via magnetic and mechanical means.
Firstly
, the metal parts and wiring boards
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
assessed with the aim of refining the precious metals they might include other than copper, which in its case,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
smelted and all material altogether
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get
reused.
Secondly
, the plastic remains might
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get
reprocessed into lower
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class
plastics or
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get
incinerated as an alternative source of energy. It is noteworthy that there are other materials that their purpose or course of action are not showcased here.
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