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The population pie chart.

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The pie chart below depicts the distribution of different ages of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and also the projection for the same for the period 2050. As of now, the adolescents and teenagers of both the country, Yemen and Italy corresponds to approximately 50% for the former and 15% for the successor. The projections of the same age category in Yemen took a blow, merely occupying 37% of the entire population and in Italy it reduces slightly, consisting of only 11% of the entire population at that period. Young adults, working class and not yet retired age category in Yemen represents 46% of the entire population, while on the other hand, it represents 62% of the entire population in Italy. As for the projection, Yemen category increases sharply almost covering 57% on the entire graph but Italy took a blow and just only occupying 46%. The retired category of Yemen covers merely 4% of the entire graph and projection does not represent much of growth in that category as well. It will slightly increase and would be representing 6% of entire population. On the contrary, Italy’s graph corresponds to almost 24% and projections foresee that the population will almost double and will cover 42% of the demography.
The pie chart below depicts the distribution of
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ages of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and
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, the adolescents and
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teenagers
of both the country, Yemen and Italy corresponds to approximately 50% for the former and 15% for the successor. The projections of the same age
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in Yemen took a blow,
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occupying 37% of the
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entire
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population
and in Italy it
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reduces
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11% of the
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at that period. Young adults, working
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class
and not
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retired age
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in Yemen represents 46% of the
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population
, while
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, it represents 62% of the
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entire
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population
in Italy. As for the projection, Yemen
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increases
sharply
almost covering 57% on the
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entire
graph
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Italy took a blow and
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occupying 46%. The retired
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of Yemen covers
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4% of the
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graph and projection does not represent much of growth in that
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as well
. It will
slightly
increase and would be representing 6% of
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entire
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.
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, Italy’s graph corresponds to almost 24% and projections foresee that the
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will almost double and will cover 42% of the demography.
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