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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brand between 2009 to 2013.write a report for the university , lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brand between 2009 to 2013. write a report for the university, lecturer describing the information shown below. WYm5e
The chart illustrate that global sales of the most five mobile phone brands between 2009 to 2013. A maximum selling of the mobile phone is sumsung in 2013 as compared with least number of selling of the phone is ZTE around 75% only. In 2009, nokia is the greatest mobile phone selling company and their rate is almost 450. But it is significantly decreased year by year and in 2013 their selling ration is half like around 250. However, Apple brand is well perform compared with LG. . . . It is rapidly increased. In 2013, Apple's selling count is 150. Moreover, LG's selling ratio is half of the Apple's selling. ZTE brand is not much popular according to chart, but it's upsurge. Overall, Samsung is the popular brand with the highest mobile phone selling company whereas, ZTE is not more popular with lowest rate of mobile phone selling company. Other thing is, In 2009, Nokia has a best saler and Apple has a least.
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that global sales of the most five mobile
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between 2009 to 2013
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A maximum
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selling
of the mobile
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phone
is
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sumsung
in 2013 as compared with
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number of
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of the
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phone
is
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ZTE
around 75%
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In 2009,
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nokia
is the greatest mobile
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phone
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selling
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and their rate is almost 450.
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But
it is
significantly
decreased year by year and in 2013 their
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selling
ration is half like around 250.

However
, Apple
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brand
is well perform compared with LG.
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count is 150.
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, LG's
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ratio is half of the Apple's selling.

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ZTE
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brand
is not much popular according to chart,
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but
it's upsurge.

Overall
, Samsung is the popular
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brand
with the highest mobile
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phone
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company
whereas,
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ZTE
is not more popular with
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lowest
rate of mobile
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phone
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company
. Other thing is, In 2009, Nokia has
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IELTS academic The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brand between 2009 to 2013. write a report for the university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

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