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The plans of public park in 1920 and today

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The maps outline the changes that took place in a public park called Grange Park from 1920 to today. Overall, the park was changed and renovated to offer people more possibilities than they used to have decades ago such as a cafe, theatre, playground and parking. In details, the park was opened in 1920 and entertainment facilities including a larger stage and various areas for recreation have since been added to it. There was also notable relocation in terms of seats and the only areas that remained unchanged were the entrances and one minor garden. Besides, the fountain has been removed in favour of a rose garden with full seating arrangements around it. To the left of the new garden, the previous stage for musicians has been turned into a much larger amphitheatre facing the opposite direction that will allow for concerts in the park. This change has necessitated the removal of both seatings on the far left side as well as the rose garden in the bottom left corner of the map. Moreover, the pond for water plants was removed from the right -top part of the garden and a children's play area was introduced in the right-top of the park, and near this area, a cafe was built. Instead of the pond, a water feature has been built occupying the bottom right corner. Interestingly, the number of rose gardens was reduced to two. Besides, an underground car park was built in the lower right corner of the park. Rating 3. 49 (65 Votes) Map Graph Writing Academic Writing Task 1 Next RSS Huỳnh Quang Hiển 21 days 9 hours The maps outline the changes that took place in a public park called Grange Park from 1920 to recent years. In general, the park has been changed and renovated to offer people more possibilities and facilities than they used to have decades ago, and some of the facilities include a cafe, children's area, and playground. Starting from the left side of the park, the stage for musicians was replaced by a larger amphitheatre. In 1920, there were small rose gardens scattered along the park. However, one of the gardens remains the same at the northwest corner of the park while the other two have been integrated and relocated at the centre of the park, where the fountain used to be. There was also the relocation of the seating arrangements. Now the big rose garden has full seatings arrangements around it. Moving on to the right side of the park, with the small rose garden demolished, a cafe has been put into use on this site. Moreover, a water feature has been added to the place where the fountain used to be. A pond of water has been substituted by the children's play area. A new underground c
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changes
that took place in a public
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park
called Grange
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from 1920 to
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today
.
Overall
, the
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park
was
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changed
and renovated to offer
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people
more possibilities than they
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used
to have decades ago such as a
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cafe
,
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theatre
, playground and parking.

In
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details
, the
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park
was opened
in 1920 and entertainment facilities including a larger stage and various
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areas
for recreation have since been
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added
to it. There was
also
notable relocation in terms of seats and the
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only
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areas
that remained unchanged were the entrances and one minor
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garden
.
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, the fountain has
been removed
in
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favour
of a
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rose
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garden
with full
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seating
arrangements around it. To the
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left
of the new
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garden
, the previous stage for musicians has
been turned
into a much larger
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amphitheatre
facing the opposite direction that will
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allow
for concerts in the
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park
. This
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change
has necessitated the removal of both
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seatings on
the far
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left
side
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the
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rose
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garden
in the bottom
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left
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corner
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, the pond for
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plants
was removed
from the
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right
-top part of the
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and a children's play
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was introduced
in the right-top of the
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park
, and near this
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area
, a
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cafe
was built
.
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of the pond, a
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feature has
been built
occupying the bottom
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right
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.
Interestingly
, the number of
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rose
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gardens
was
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reduced
to two.
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, an underground car
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park
was built
in the lower
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right
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corner
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The maps outline the
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changes
that took place in a public
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park
called Grange
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Park
from 1920 to recent years.

In general
, the
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park
has been
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changed
and renovated to offer
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people
more possibilities and facilities than they
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used
to have decades ago, and
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some of the
facilities include a
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cafe
, children's
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area
, and playground.

Starting from the
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left
side of the
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park
, the stage for musicians
was replaced
by a larger
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amphitheatre
. In 1920, there were
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small
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rose
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gardens
scattered along the
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park
.
However
, one of the
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gardens
remains the same at the northwest
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corner
of the
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park
while the other two have
been integrated
and relocated at the
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centre
of the
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park
, where the fountain
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also
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arrangements.
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the
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has full
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seatings
arrangements around it.

Moving on to the
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right
side of the
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park
, with the
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small
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rose
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garden
demolished, a
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cafe
has
been put
into
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, a
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feature has been
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added
to the place where the fountain
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used
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has
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by the children's play
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. A new underground
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IELTS academic The plans of public park in 1920 and today

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