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The information about the proportion of whole world population in India, China, USA and Japan between 1950 and 2000, with future estimation till 2050 is depicted by the rendered vertical bar graph.

The information about the proportion of whole world population in India, China, USA and Japan between 1950 and 2000, with future estimation till 2050 is depicted by the rendered vertical bar graph. l7EO1
The information about the proportion of the whole world population in India, China, the USA and Japan between 1950 and 2000, with future estimation till 2050 is depicted by the rendered vertical bar graph. The data has been calibrated in percentage. Overall, it can be clearly witnessed that China have the highest population among all the countries at the start of the period but in the end, it is estimated that India will take the lead by 2050. China, the United States and Japan were showing a downward trend whereas India is showing an opposite trend. A higher rate of population was observed by China, it accounted for 25% in 1950. Following by India which was having the second-highest population around 15%. The least amount of people was in the case of America and Japan and it constitutes for 10% and 5% respectively. In 2000, the Indian population was increased by 4% and it reached 18% whereas in China there was a slight decline in the rate of the population by 2%. Also, in the USA and Japan, there was a gradual decline in population, and it was around 7% and 4% respectively. It is predicted that the percentage in USA and Japan will remain the same in the USA, while in Japan the population will keep on falling till 2050. The most important prediction is that India will outnumber China in the percentage of population by 2050.
The information about the proportion of the whole world
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population
in India, China, the USA and
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Japan
between 1950 and 2000, with future estimation till 2050
is depicted
by the rendered vertical bar graph. The data has
been calibrated
in percentage.

Overall
, it can be
clearly
witnessed that China have the highest
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population
among all the countries at the
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start
of the period
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but
in the
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end
, it
is estimated
that India will take the lead by 2050. China, the United States and
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Japan
were showing a downward trend whereas India is showing an opposite trend.

A higher rate of
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population
was observed
by China, it accounted for 25% in 1950. Following by India which was having the second-highest
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population
around 15%. The least amount of
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people
was in the case of America and
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Japan
and it constitutes for 10% and 5%
respectively
.

In 2000, the Indian
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population
was increased
by 4% and it reached 18% whereas in China there was a slight decline in the rate of the
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population
by 2%.
Also
, in the USA and
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Japan
, there was a gradual decline in
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population
, and it was around 7% and 4%
respectively
.

It
is predicted
that the percentage
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in USA
and
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Japan
will remain the same in the USA, while in
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Japan
the
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population
will
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keep
on falling till 2050. The most
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important
prediction is that India will outnumber China in the percentage of
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population
by 2050.
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IELTS academic The information about the proportion of whole world population in India, China, USA and Japan between 1950 and 2000, with future estimation till 2050 is depicted by the rendered vertical bar graph.

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