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The maps illustrate road access to a city health care centre between 2007 and 2010.

The maps illustrate road access to a city health care centre between 2007 and 2010. D2ybp
The maps illustrate road access to a city health care centre between 2007 and 2010. Overall, in 2007 there were 3 roads to go to the city hospital. While in 2010 there were more than 3 roads for the hospital. In 2010 they added 2 roundabouts and instant of bus stop they built bus station. Both have ring roads. In 2007, the ring road was rounded all over the city hospital. There were 6 buses stop on the hospital road in front of city hospital. In the north east there was a car parking centre for public and staff members for the hospital. On the other hand, in 2010, there was a few changed in the hospital road. They added 2 roundabouts and connected to the bus station. They removed bus stop and replace which bus station was on the west. Another public parking and staff parking separated other each. Public parking was connected to the left to the city hospital and staff parking was remain same place.
The maps illustrate
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access to a city health care
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centre
between 2007 and 2010.

Overall
, in 2007 there were 3
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roads
to go to the city
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hospital
. While in 2010 there were more than 3
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roads
for the
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hospital
. In
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2010 they
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added
2 roundabouts and instant of bus
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stop
they built bus station. Both have ring roads.

In 2007, the ring
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road
was rounded
all over the city
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hospital
. There were 6 buses
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stop
on the
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hospital
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road
in front of city
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hospital
. In the
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north east
there was a car
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parking
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centre
for public and staff members for the hospital.

On the other hand
, in 2010, there was a few
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changed
in the
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hospital
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road
. They
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added
2 roundabouts and connected to the bus station. They removed bus
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stop
and replace which bus station was on the west. Another public
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parking
and staff
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parking
separated other each. Public
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parking
was connected
to the
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left
to the city
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hospital
and staff
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parking
was
Consider using a past participle here: "remained".
remain
same place.

IELTS academic The maps illustrate road access to a city health care centre between 2007 and 2010.

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