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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The master plan describes the changes in that took place in a public park called Grange park on Arnold avenue from 1920 and today. Overall, majority of structures have been changed and renovated to offer people with more possibilities than they used to have decades ago such as cafes, theatre while the entrance is the same for both parks. In details, the park opened in 1920 had entertainment facilities including larger stage for musicians with seats on the left on the stage. Rose garden and seats were situated in the upper right and lower left part of the stage which was situated towards the left the entrance. Similarly a fountain was constructed in the middle of the park which separated the map into two halves. To the right of the entrance a glasshouse was located on the lower side and a rose garden on the upper left corner. A pond for water plants was present at the corner of the plan and seats were present. Today, the park have various recreational activities center like children’s play area on the top right corner and water feature on the down right corner. Also, a rose garden is situated in the middle of the entrance which is surrounded by 4 seating arrangement. Café is placed on the middle of the entrance and children’s play area which can be used for relaxation. Likewise, a large theatre is built to perform concerts which is surrounded by seats and a rose garden is constructed on the top of the theatre on the left side. Similarly a underground car park is also constructed on the left side of the entrance from the Eldon street.
The master plan
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describes
the
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changes
in that took place in a public
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park
called Grange
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park
on Arnold avenue from 1920 and
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today
.

Overall
,
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majority of
structures have been
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changed
and renovated to offer
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people
with more possibilities than they
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used
to have decades ago such as
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cafes
,
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theatre
while the
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entrance
is the same for both parks.

In
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details
, the
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park
opened in 1920 had entertainment facilities including larger stage for musicians with
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seats
on the
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left
on the stage.
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Rose
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garden
and
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seats
were situated
in the upper
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right
and lower
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left
part of the stage which
was situated
towards the
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left
the
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entrance
.
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Similarly
a fountain
was constructed
in the middle of the
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park
which separated the map into two halves. To the
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right
of the
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entrance
a glasshouse
was located
on the lower side and a
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rose
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garden
on the upper
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left
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corner
. A pond for water plants was present at the
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corner
of the plan and
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seats
were present.

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Today
, the
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park
have various recreational activities center like children’s play area on the top
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right
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corner
and water feature on the down
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right
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corner
.
Also
, a
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rose
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garden
is situated
in the middle of the
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entrance
which
is surrounded
by 4 seating arrangement. Café
is placed
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on the middle
of the
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entrance
and children’s play area which can be
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used
for relaxation.
Likewise
, a large
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theatre
is built
to perform concerts which
is surrounded
by
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seats
and a
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rose
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garden
is constructed
on the top of the
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theatre
on the
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left
side.
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Similarly
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a
underground car
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park
is
also
constructed on the
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left
side of the
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entrance
from the Eldon street.
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IELTS academic The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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