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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The maps illustrate the developments which took place in the public garden namely Grange Park from 1920 to the present day. Overall, a comparison of the two maps reveals a complete transformation from a traditional to a modern one. In 1920, there was a garden in the middle of a park, which is replaced by a rose garden, and a sitting area which was all around the park are removed and placed along with the rose garden. Moreover, the stage which was located in west demolished to make way for a theatre for concerts. Furthermore, the rose garden is disappeared from the southwest. In 1920, there was a pond in the northeast, which is disappeared, and a children's play area has appeared, and beside this newly café is opened. In the south, there was a glasshouse; it is knocked down, and a water feature is placed there. Further development is the car park; this is established underground at the east side of the park. However, entrance at north and south is remained the same.
The maps illustrate the developments which took place in the public
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garden
namely
Grange
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Park
from 1920 to the present day.

Overall
, a comparison of the two maps reveals a complete transformation from a traditional to a modern one.

In 1920, there was a
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garden
in the middle of a
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park
, which
is replaced
by a rose
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garden
, and a sitting area which was all around the
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park
are removed
and placed along with the rose
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garden
.
Moreover
, the stage which
was located
in west demolished to
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make
way for a
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theatre
for concerts.
Furthermore
, the rose
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garden
is disappeared
from the southwest.

In 1920, there was a pond in the northeast, which
is disappeared
, and a children's play area has appeared, and beside this
newly
café
is opened
. In the south, there was a glasshouse; it
is knocked
down, and a water feature
is placed
there.
Further
development is the car
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park
; this
is established
underground at the east side of the
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park
.
However
, entrance at north and south
is remained
the same.

IELTS academic The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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