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The plans below show a public park when it first opended in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main differences.

The maps illustrate the differences in the Grange park, when it first opened, in 1920 and today. Overall, an important difference is that the main fountain is substituted with a squared rose garden with seats all over its edges. In addition, the small stage for musicians has been transformed into an amphitheatre for concerts, and a water feature has been constructed at the southeast side of the park. The entrances from Arnold avenue and Eldon street are still the same but there has also been constructed a new entrance underground the park. Moreover, the four seats have been removed from their previous locations and they now surround the main rose garden. As for the rose gardens, only the northwest garden has remained in its initial location since the other two do not exist anymore. There has been established a new café just right of the Arnold entrance, in the place were previously a rose garden existed. Lastly, the old pond for water plants had been removed and substituted with a children’s play area, which is located next to the café on the right side.
The maps illustrate the differences in the Grange park, when it
first
opened, in 1920 and
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today
.

Overall
, an
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important
difference is that the main fountain
is substituted
with a squared
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rose
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garden
with seats all over its edges.
In addition
, the
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small
stage for musicians has
been transformed
into an
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amphitheatre
for concerts, and a water feature has
been constructed
at the southeast side of the park.

The entrances from Arnold avenue and Eldon street are
still
the same
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but
there has
also
been constructed
a new entrance underground the park.
Moreover
, the four seats have
been removed
from their previous
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locations and
they
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now
surround the main
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rose
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garden
. As for the
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rose
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gardens
,
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only
the northwest
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garden
has remained in its initial location since the other two do not exist anymore. There has
been established
a new café
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just
right of the Arnold entrance, in the place were previously a
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rose
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garden
existed.
Lastly
, the
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old
pond for water plants had
been removed
and substituted with a children’s play area, which
is located
next
to the café on the right side.
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IELTS academic The plans below show a public park when it first opended in 1920 and the same park today.

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6.0
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