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The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

The column graph demonstrates the percentage of individuals attending cinemas in a particular European country on different days. It indicates that Saturday experienced the highest percentage among all the others, while the fractions for Friday and Sunday indicate almost the same patterns. Looking at the details, as regards Saturday, the proportion in 2005 was the dominant, ( with 45%), and then (40% and just above 42% between 2003 and 2007 respectively). Turning to Friday people were ubiquitous in all years, at 30%. Similarly, Sundays recorded almost the same, but with some changes in 2005 and 2007, with (a little under 35% and approximately 32% in turn). By contrast, Monday's percentage illustrated the lowest fraction, at 10% in 2003, about 14% and 12% between 2005 and 2007 respectively. If we look at Tuesday and Thursday the proportions depict that both of them recorded almost the same percentages in 2005 and 2007, with 17% and 18% in turn.
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days. It indicates that Saturday experienced the highest
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among all the others, while the fractions for Friday and Sunday indicate almost the same patterns.

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, as regards Saturday, the proportion in 2005 was the dominant,
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above 42% between 2003 and 2007
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). Turning to Friday
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were ubiquitous in all years, at 30%.
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in 2005 and 2007, with (a
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under 35% and approximately 32% in turn).

By contrast, Monday's
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illustrated the lowest fraction, at 10% in 2003, about 14% and 12% between 2005 and 2007
respectively
. If we look at Tuesday and Thursday the proportions depict that both of them recorded almost the same
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in 2005 and 2007, with 17% and 18% in turn.
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