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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. Write at least 150 words.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. r9ln
The rendered charts describe about the activities that’s boys and girls participate particularly. Overall, we can see that the guys usually participate in outdoor activities after computer gaming, whereas girls spend most of their time reading books and dancing. Boys utilize their maximum time playing games in the computer, some of them chooses to play basketball instead, very few of them have enrolled for activities such as soccer, skateboarding, listening to music and lastly reading. 34 % of boys spent their time in computer gaming, 26 % in basketball, 17 % in soccer, 11 % in skateboarding, 10 % in listening to music, and 2% in reading, respectively. On the other hand, girls spend their leisure time the most in reading, others are more into dancing and few others are interested in computer gaming, listening to music, netball and gymnastics. 21 % of female students prefer reading books and filling their minds with knowledge, 27% are interested in dancing, others 10% in listening to music, 15% in playing netball, and 11 % in gymnastics, respectively.
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IELTS academic The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.

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