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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. oyjw
the pie charts illistrate the percentage of children activities according to their gender, this information is a result of a survey conducted. overall, it is shown that boys' cultural and leisure activities are different from girls. though there are few activities which are common between two genders. the first chart which shows boys' activities in free time, illistrates that most boys spend their time on computer games while according to second chart, only sixteen percent of girls spend their pair time on computer games and most of them prefer dancing which includes twenty seven percent of girls. the first chart shows that many boys are willing to do sports than other steady activities like reading. as we see, twenty six percent play basketball, seventy percent play soccer and eleven percent go skateboarding. according to second chart about girls' activities, after dancing, twenty one percent of girls spend their time on reading books and non-sporty activities like computer games. the rate of reading in pair tim edevoted for girls are far more than boys, and it is understood that only a few boys devote time on reading which is just two percent of them.
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IELTS academic The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

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