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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. 9LLAw
The two pie charts draw the conclusion of a survey of boys' and girls' cultural and leisure activities. Overall, equal quantities of both sexes enjoyed listening to music, on the contrary number of girls liked reading. There were also numerous differences in terms of the children's preferred sports. The two pie charts draw the conclusion of a survey of boys' and girls' cultural and leisure activities. Overall, equal Turning to the first chart, we can observe that boys prefer playing computer gameis exercised by 17%. Skateboarding and listening to music are lessht difference between computer games and netball, the latter is practiced at 15% rate. Similarly to skateboarding popularity among boys, 11% of girls go in for gymnastics. Listening to music comes as the least popular leisure, with a proportion of 10%, equal to those on the first chart.
The two pie
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draw the conclusion of a survey of boys' and girls' cultural and leisure activities.

Overall
, equal quantities of both sexes enjoyed listening to music,
on the contrary
number of girls liked reading. There were
also
numerous differences in terms of the children's preferred sports.

The two pie
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charts
draw the conclusion of a survey of boys' and girls' cultural and leisure activities.

Overall
, equal

Turning to the
first
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chart
, we can observe that boys prefer playing computer
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gameis
exercised by 17%. Skateboarding and listening to music are
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lessht
difference between computer games and netball, the latter
is practiced
at 15% rate.
Similarly
to skateboarding popularity among boys, 11% of girls go in for gymnastics. Listening to music
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comes
as the least popular leisure, with a proportion of 10%, equal to those on the
first
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chart
.
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IELTS academic The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

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