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The chart below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015.

The chart below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015. LrrQ1
The bar chart and the table illustrate the earnings in billion dollars and percentage change respectively, in the export of different products of a particular country in the year 2015 and 2016. Overall, the value of almost all the products is more in 2016 than in 2015 except in the category of gems and jewelry, where it is less. The highest growth is in earnings through textile export. In 2015, petroleum products earned around $60 billion, which grew by 3% in 2016. Engineered goods have a value of over $60 billion in 2016 and it was 8. 5% less in the previous year. However, the export of agricultural products did not notice a significant rise and was approximately $31 billion in 2015 and remained more or less unchanged in the next year. Textile products observed a rapid increase in just a year. The value of its export increased by 15. 24% from 2015 to 2016. Unlike others, the export of gems and jewelry declined, and so did its earnings. From almost $45 billion, it decreased by 5. 18% to around $40 billion in 2016.
The bar chart and the table illustrate the earnings in
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billion
dollars and percentage
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respectively
, in the
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export
of
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of a particular country in the year 2015 and 2016.

Overall
, the value of almost all the
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products
is more in 2016 than in 2015 except in the category of gems and jewelry, where it is less. The highest growth is in earnings through textile export.

In 2015, petroleum
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products
earned around $60
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billion
, which grew by 3% in 2016. Engineered
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goods
have a value of over $60
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billion
in 2016 and it was 8. 5% less in the previous year.
However
, the
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export
of agricultural
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products
did not notice a significant rise and was approximately $31
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billion
in 2015 and remained more or less unchanged in the
next
year.

Textile
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products
observed a rapid increase in
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a year. The value of its
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export
increased by 15. 24% from 2015 to 2016. Unlike others, the
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of gems and jewelry declined, and
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did its earnings. From almost $45
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billion
, it decreased by 5. 18% to around $40
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billion
in 2016.
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IELTS academic The chart below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015.

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