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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. 7aaOY
The diagram illustrates the carbonated beverage production. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the procedures can be divided into 5 steps, namely 1. water cleaning, 2. heating evaporation and carbonation, 3. mixing, 4. filtering and filling and 5. packaging. To begin with, raw water is purified in the first stage by the filter, then the water is induced by a pump to flow through a container which consists of water softener and chemicals. Secondly, the water is heated by electric heaters and then it flows through a cooling pipe. After that, the water is carbonated by the carbonation process which uses carbon dioxide. Thirdly, the carbonated water is then mixed in the mixing tank and colouring, syrup and flavour is extracted from the water. Afterwards, another filter is used to filter the water. Fourthly, the water is filled in a variety types of containers which are bottles and cans. Finally, the containers which contains water is packaged and is distributed by trucks to the supermarket.
The diagram illustrates the carbonated beverage production.
Overall
, it can be
clearly
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seen
that the procedures can
be divided
into 5 steps,
namely
1.
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water
cleaning, 2.
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heating
evaporation and carbonation, 3.
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mixing
, 4.
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filtering
and filling and 5.
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packaging
.

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begin
with, raw
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water
is purified
in the
first
stage by the filter, then the
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water
is induced
by a pump to flow through a container which consists of
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water
softener and chemicals.
Secondly
, the
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water
is heated
by electric heaters and then it flows through a cooling pipe. After that, the
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water
is carbonated
by the carbonation process which
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uses
carbon dioxide.
Thirdly
, the carbonated
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water
is then mixed in the mixing tank and
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colouring
, syrup and
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flavour
is extracted
from the
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water
. Afterwards, another filter is
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used
to filter the
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water
.
Fourthly
, the
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water
is filled
in a variety types of containers which are bottles and cans.
Finally
, the containers which contains
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water
is packaged
and
is distributed
by trucks to the supermarket.
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IELTS academic The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
166 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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