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The pie charts show the ways workers in Rockingham normally traveled to work in 2005 and 2015

The pie charts show the ways workers in Rockingham normally traveled to work in 2005 and 2015 RwVQG
The given pie charts illustrate how people commute to work in a certain city in 2005 and 2015. Overall, in both years, while driving individual cars to work was the most popular way of commuting, walking was the least popular one. The percentage of people walking and going on buses remained unchanged in the period, with 5 and 15 percent respectively. The period of 10 years, from 2005 to 2015, witnessed a reduction of the use of personal cars and carpool. In particular, while the number of people driving cars to work in 2005 accounted for a half of the total number of the year, this figure decreased by 15 percent in 2015. The percentage of people using carpool was reduced by a quarter in 2015 compared to 2005. It is worth noting that there are 5% more people working at home in 2015 (15% of the year) compared to 2005. At the same time, the proportion of people cycling to work was also doubled, from 5% to 10%.
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pie charts illustrate how
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people
commute to
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work
in a certain city in 2005 and 2015.

Overall
, in both years, while driving individual cars to
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work
was the most popular way of commuting, walking was the least popular one. The percentage of
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people
walking and going on buses remained unchanged in the period, with 5 and 15 percent
respectively
.

The period of 10 years, from 2005 to 2015, witnessed a reduction of the
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use
of personal cars and carpool.
In particular
, while the number of
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people
driving cars to
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work
in 2005 accounted for a half of the total number of the
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year
, this figure decreased by 15 percent in 2015. The percentage of
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people
using carpool was
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reduced
by a quarter in 2015 compared to 2005.

It is worth noting that there are 5% more
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people
working at home in 2015 (15% of the
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year)
compared to 2005. At the same time, the proportion of
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people
cycling to
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work
was
also
doubled, from 5% to 10%.
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the ways workers in Rockingham normally traveled to work in 2005 and 2015

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