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The pie charts show the energy production in France in 1995 and 2005

The pie charts show the energy production in France in 1995 and 2005 NDl0
The pie chart illustrates the changes in the production of energy that took place in France between 1995 to 2005. Overall, it can clearly be seen that all of the produced energy experienced a significantly with the exception of Petro, which decreased drastically. Moreover, gas, petro and coal contributes the most in both years whereas nuclear and other didn’t make up as much to the production. In terms of the energy production in 1995, gas, petro and coal were the greatest energy contributor. Each of which accounted for just below 30%. The remaining percentage, which was roughly 10%, was contributed by nuclear, which made up 6. 40% and 4. 90%, respectively. Regarding the amount of energy produced in 2005, the percentage for gas and coal remained relatively steady until 2005. In regard to petro, the percentage experienced a significant decrease to just below one-fifth between 1995 and 2005. In contrast, the figures for nuclear and other increased slightly by approximately 5% in the same period.
The pie chart illustrates the
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changes
in the production of
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energy
that took place in France
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between 1995 to 2005
.

Overall
, it can
clearly
be
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seen
that
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all of the
produced
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energy
experienced a
significantly
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Petro
, which decreased
drastically
.
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, gas,
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petro
and coal contributes the most in both years whereas nuclear and other didn’t
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make
up as much to the production.

In terms of the
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energy
production in 1995, gas,
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petro
and coal were the greatest
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energy
contributor. Each of which accounted for
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just
below 30%. The remaining percentage, which was roughly 10%,
was contributed
by nuclear, which made up 6. 40% and 4. 90%,
respectively
.

Regarding the amount of
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energy
produced in 2005, the percentage for gas and coal remained
relatively
steady until 2005. In regard to
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petro
, the percentage experienced a significant decrease to
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just
below one-fifth between 1995 and 2005.
In contrast
, the figures for nuclear and other increased
slightly
by approximately 5% in the same period.
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the energy production in France in 1995 and 2005

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