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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. 3Jbm
The map illustrates the town of Garlsdon and two proposed sites for the construction of a supermarket. Clearly, site 2 has better connectivity compared to site 1. To begin with, S2 has been planned in the town centre where there is a no traffic zone while, S1 has been proposed to be built in the countryside. A railway line originating from North west travels towards south east through the city centre. Similarly, there are 3 main roads that connect the city centre with Hindon, 12km in the north west, Cransdon, 25km in the south east and Bransdon, 16km in the south west. The city centre is surrounded by residential area on all sides but, majority of the area lies in west and east. A small space has been occupied by industries in the north and south. Finally, countryside surrounds the entire town. S2 is planned to be in close proximity to the residential area and the railway line which also enables connectivity to Hindon and Cransdon. However, S1 is proposed to be in the north west corner in the countryside. Better connectivity would be possible because both railways and main road pass through the site.
The map illustrates the town of
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Garlsdon
and two proposed
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sites
for the construction of a

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supermarket
.

Clearly
,
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site
2 has better connectivity compared to
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site
1.

To
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begin
with, S2 has
been planned
in the town
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centre
where there is a no traffic zone while,

S1 has
been proposed
to
be built
in the countryside. A railway line originating from North

west travels towards
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south east
through the city
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centre
.
Similarly
, there are 3 main roads

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that
connect the city
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centre
with
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Hindon
,
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12km
in the
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north west
,
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Cransdon
,
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25km
in the

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south east
and
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Bransdon
,
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16km
in the
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south west
. The city
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centre
is surrounded
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by


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residential
area on all sides
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but
,
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majority of
the area lies in west and east. A
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small
space has
been occupied
by industries in the north and south.
Finally
, countryside surrounds the entire town.

S2
is planned
to be in
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close proximity
to the residential area and the railway line which
also


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enables
connectivity to
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Hindon
and
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Cransdon
.
However
, S1
is proposed
to be in the
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north west
corner in the countryside. Better connectivity would be possible
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because
both railways

and main road pass through the
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site
.
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IELTS academic The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Academic
  American English
9 paragraphs
195 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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