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The pie charts show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010

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The pie charts compare in percentages the standard household spending on six categories of needs in a nation between 1950 and 2010. Overall, it is obvious from the charts that housing accounted for the highest proportion in 1950 while in 2010 the most popular category was food. Healthcare was rated as the lowest expenditure in both years. It is clear that the proportion of expenditure varied in most categories within the given period. Housing accounted for a high percentage at 72. 1% in 1950 and 22. 0% in 2010 respectively. Food was rated at 11. 2% in 1950 but was accounted as the highest proportion on expenditure in 2010. Healthcare was rated as the lowest expenditure in both 1950 and 2010 at just 2. 4% and 4. 5% respectively Education accounted for a negligible proportion in both 1950 and 2010 at 6. 6% and 6. 3% respectively. Spending on transportation was rated low in 1950 at 3. 3% but increased by 10% in 2010. Other needs in both 1950 and 2010 acounted for 4. 4% and 19. 2% respectively.
The pie charts compare in percentages the standard household spending on six categories of needs in a nation between 1950 and 2010.

Overall
, it is obvious from the charts that housing
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for the highest
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in 1950 while in 2010 the most popular category was food. Healthcare was
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as the lowest
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expenditure
in both years.

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of
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expenditure
varied in most categories within the
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period. Housing
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accounted
for a high percentage at 72. 1% in 1950 and 22. 0% in 2010
respectively
. Food was
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rated
at 11. 2% in 1950
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was
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accounted
as the highest
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proportion
on
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expenditure
in 2010. Healthcare was
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rated
as the lowest
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expenditure
in both 1950 and 2010 at
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just
2. 4% and 4. 5%
respectively


Education
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accounted
for a negligible
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proportion
in both 1950 and 2010 at 6. 6% and 6. 3%
respectively
. Spending on transportation was
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rated
low in 1950 at 3. 3%
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but
increased by 10% in 2010. Other needs in both 1950 and 2010
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acounted
for 4. 4% and 19. 2%
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010

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