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The pie charts provide information on the proportion of online market for retail section in Canada in the years of 2005 and 2010.

The pie charts provide information on the proportion of online market for retail section in Canada in the years of 2005 and 2010. 8Gkbl

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IELTS academic The pie charts provide information on the proportion of online market for retail section in Canada in the years of 2005 and 2010.

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109 words

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