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The pie charts provide information about the purposes of people who visited public libraries in Britain in two years.

The pie charts provide information about the purposes of people who visited public libraries in Britain in two years. WBne
The pie charts provide information about the purposes of people who visited public libraries in Britain in two years. It is evident that the most common use of people going to the libraries was to borrow or return books, and there was a new library’s function in 2000. In 1991, there were 290 million visits to public libraries. In particular, the percentage of people visiting the public library to borrow and return books was 65%, followed by that of those who read the newspaper or magazine with 15%. Also, 10% was the proportion of people obtained information and studied in libraries. In 2000, although the number of library visits increased by 60 million, Britain experienced a considerable decline in the percentage of visits to borrow and return books. In addition, the proportion of people going to the library to obtain information doubled to 20% while those of studying and reading newspaper and magazine fell sharply to 2% and 5% respectively. Lastly, the new use of the library (borrow and return videos) constituted 18% of total visits.
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who visited public libraries in Britain in two years.

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going to the libraries was to
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books, and there was a new library’s function in 2000. In 1991, there were 290 million
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visits
to public libraries.
In particular
, the percentage of
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people
visiting the public library to
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borrow
and
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return
books was 65%, followed by that of those who read the newspaper or magazine with 15%.
Also
, 10% was the proportion of
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people
obtained information and studied in libraries.

In 2000, although the number of library
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visits
increased by 60 million, Britain experienced a considerable decline in the percentage of
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visits
to
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borrow
and
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return
books.
In addition
, the proportion of
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people
going to the library to obtain information doubled to 20% while those of studying and reading newspaper and magazine fell
sharply
to 2% and 5%
respectively
.
Lastly
, the new
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of the library
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videos) constituted 18% of total
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