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The pie charts provide information about age group of the populace Republic of Yemen and Italian Republic in 2000, also forecasts for 2050.

The pie charts provide information about age group of the populace Republic of Yemen and Italian Republic in 2000, also forecasts for 2050. bj0l
The pie charts provide information about age group of the populace Republic of Yemen and Italian Republic in 2000, also forecasts for 2050. Overall, the largest population of people was the age range from 15 to 59 in Italy of 2000. Other proportion of humans on the old ages 60 and more represented approximately 24%. Therefore, the youngest age group ranked 3rd and it can also be concluded that fertility in Italy was low. However fecundity of Yemen occupied almost half of community in 2000. Statistics show that in a country that is constantly at war, the percentage of births is higher than in a developed country like Italy. According to prognosis two pie charts for 2050 give supposes that will have increase humans of meddle ages in Arabian places about 10-15%. However, in Italy the proportion of the total population in older age groups will have increased while the proportion in younger age groups will have declined.
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of the populace Republic of Yemen and Italian Republic in 2000,
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range from 15 to 59 in Italy of 2000. Other proportion of humans on the
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60 and more represented approximately 24%.
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, the youngest
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ranked 3rd and it can
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that in a country
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developed country
like Italy.

According to prognosis two pie charts for 2050 give supposes that will have increase humans of meddle
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ages
in Arabian places about 10-15%.

However
, in Italy the proportion of the total population in older
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age
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will have increased while the proportion in younger
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will have declined.

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