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The given pie chart compares the data about ages of people living in Yemen and Italy during the 2000 and predictive information for 2050.

The given pie chart compares the data about ages of people living in Yemen and Italy during the 2000 and predictive information for 2050. 6EJW
The given pie chart compares the data about ages of people living in Yemen and Italy during the 2000 and predictive information for 2050. Overall, it can be seen how percentage will changes during the years. According to the given information in 2000, half of population was 0-14 year-old children in Yemen. However, in Italy this ratio was 14. 3 per cent what was very low compared with Yemen’s residents. Proportion of population in Italy consisted 61. 6 per cent of individuals aged from 15 till 59 year in 2000. At that date, 46. 3 per cent of citizens were people who were at age between 15 and 59 in Italy. Other 3. 6 per cent was 60+ year old people. Rate of population above 60 year was 24. 1 per cent in Italy. By the projections for 2050, population of 15-59 years will reach 57. 3 per cent. Percentage for people aged 60+ will gain only 2. 1 per cent. However, Italians over 60 will rise to 42. 3 per cent. Meanwhile, citizens between ages 15 and 59 will decrease till 46. 2 per cent and citizens under 14 year will drop for 3 per cent in 2050. (
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in Italy consisted 61. 6 per cent of individuals aged
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from 15 till 59
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in 2000. At that date, 46. 3 per cent of citizens
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who were at age between 15 and 59 in Italy. Other 3. 6 per cent was 60+
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. Rate of
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above 60
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was 24. 1 per cent in Italy.

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of 15-59 years will reach 57. 3 per cent. Percentage for
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aged 60+ will gain
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, Italians over 60 will rise to 42. 3 per cent. Meanwhile, citizens between ages 15 and 59 will decrease till 46. 2 per cent and citizens under 14
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will drop for 3 per cent in 2050.
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IELTS academic The given pie chart compares the data about ages of people living in Yemen and Italy during the 2000 and predictive information for 2050.

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