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The pie charts illustrates the amount of final expenditure of people in various aspects

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The pie charts illustrates the amount of final expenditure of people in various aspects such as commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008 at European territory. Generally, the biggest pie in 1958 was dometics by the commodity- food, the others highest proportion was made up by the housing. It is obviously clear that the commercial, luxury goods was the smallest used things of the figure Regarding the first pie chart, the expenditure of food took less than just over the third, making it the most crucial daily things in all of the named things. Whearas the housing’s commodities accounted for more than a fifth, it was the second highest of the chart. Moreover, the percentage of luxury goods were utterly tiny in the chart( approximately 18%) Moving on to the second pie chart, the housing made up the highest proportion at around more than just under a third, it was followed by luxury goods and travel and transport, both of them were roundly 17%. Meanwhile, the food and entertainment were extremely big distinction with the others, with the figures amouting to more than one in ten and more than a half respectively. The percentage of entertaiment took is negligible pie hence it was the smallest ranking in the figure
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in various aspects such as commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008 at European territory.

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, the biggest
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in 1958 was
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dometics
by the commodity- food, the others
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highest
proportion
was made
up by the housing. It is
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that the commercial, luxury
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goods
was the smallest
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used
things of the
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figure


Regarding the
first
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, the expenditure of food took less than
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just
over the third, making it the most crucial daily things in
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all of the
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Whearas
the housing’s commodities accounted for more than a fifth, it was the second highest of the
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chart
.
Moreover
, the percentage of luxury
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goods
were
utterly
tiny in the chart
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(
approximately 18%)

Moving on to the second
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pie
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, the housing made up the highest proportion at around more than
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under a third, it
was followed
by luxury
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goods
and travel and transport, both of them were
roundly
17%. Meanwhile, the food and entertainment were
extremely
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big
distinction with the others, with the figures
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amouting
to more than one in ten and more than a half
respectively
. The percentage of
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entertaiment
took is negligible
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hence
it was the smallest ranking in the
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figure
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IELTS academic The pie charts illustrates the amount of final expenditure of people in various aspects

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