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The supplied line graph depicts the proportion of urbanisation in South Korea and Indonesia located in Asia. Generally, it can be observed that the urbanisation rate in both countries is always over 20 percent between the mid-1960s and 2009 although there are less people moving to big cities in Indonesia than in South Korea. Another highlight feature is that these rate has increased all over the time, especially in South Korea which doubled during the period. Regarding South Korea, there was rapid urbanisation throughout over 40 years. In the first period, a third of people migrated to big cities and this rate went up significantly by 40 percent in 1989. Between 1989 and 1999, the trend increased slightly from 70 percent to over 80 percent before the trend remained constant in the last period. Turning to the proportion of people who migrate to large cities in Indonesia, it can be seen generally that it rose slightly. In the mid-1960s, only 18 percent of people moved to large cities. In the following years, the rate grew gradually, and in 1989, it counted for approximately 30 percent. On the contrary, this percentage has increased nearly 20 percent in the last two decades, which means that more and more Indonesians tend to reside in large cities.

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