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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of time people allocate on different internet activities when they are free, divided into two groups: that is youngsters (18-26 group) and the elderly people (60-70 age group).

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of time people allocate on different internet activities when they are free, divided into two groups: that is youngsters (18-26 group) and the elderly people (60-70 age group). RNLOG
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of time people allocate on different internet activities when they are free, divided into two groups: that is youngsters (18-26 group) and the elderly people (60-70 age group). Overall, it is clear that the two age groups have different preferences of internet activities. First and foremost, the younger age group spends a majority of their time on social networking (24%) compared to only 8% of the time elderly people spend. The older people, however, spend most of their time on making bookings for the cinema ticket or travel (29%) which is almost fourfold then the time youngsters spend on this stuff. Young people tend to access to music or films more than older people (just over one-fifth and 17% respectively). In addition, young people use three times more in playing online games than the other age group (18% and 6% correspondingly). Interestingly, both the age groups spend approximately the same time for activities like doing research related to the health issue and making purchases online, that is 20% and 14% for the elderly people.
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on making bookings for the cinema ticket or travel (29%) which is almost fourfold then the
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youngsters
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