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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of arrest of persons over five year period ending in 1994.

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of arrest of persons over five year period ending in 1994. AjjQM
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of arrest of persons over five year period ending in 1994. The bar graph indicates the percentage of reasons for most recent arrest arrest by gender. At first glance it could be seen that 91% of females were not arrested compared to 68% of males. As females stood the largest group that not arrested, males are the largest group that arrested. The males who were arrested accounted for at 32%, while arrested females were at just 9%. According to the bar graph public drinking is the main reason that influenced for most recent arrest to both gender. Males who drank in public were at around 30% while those females were nearly 37%. Drink driving was the second major that over 25% males were arrested most recently. Other reasons were equal to both males and females 18%. Finally compared to both gender, males were the largest group that arrested most recently according to those reasons. To sum up, comparing these two groups males were arrested more than females, while females who were not arrested more than those males belongs to reasons.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
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arrest
of persons over
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five year
period ending in 1994. The bar graph indicates the percentage of
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reasons
for most recent
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arrest
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arrest
by gender.

At
first
glance it could be
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seen
that 91% of
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females
were not
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arrested
compared to 68% of
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males
. As
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females
stood the largest
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group
that not
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arrested
,
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males
are the largest
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group
that
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arrested
. The
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males
who were
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arrested
accounted for at 32%, while
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arrested
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females
were at
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just
9%.

According to the bar graph public drinking is the main
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reason
that influenced for most recent
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arrest
to both gender.
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Males
who drank in public were at around 30% while those
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females
were
nearly
37%.
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Drink driving
was the second major that over 25%
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males
were
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arrested
most recently. Other
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reasons
were equal to both
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males
and
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females
18%.
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Finally
compared to both gender,
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males
were the largest
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group
that
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arrested
most recently according to those reasons.

To sum up, comparing these two
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groups
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males
were
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arrested
more than
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females
, while
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females
who were not
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arrested
more than those
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males
belongs to
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reasons
.
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IELTS academic The pie charts illustrate the proportion of arrest of persons over five year period ending in 1994.

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6.0
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