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Pie charts show the consumption of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar at 4 different times of the day.

Pie charts show the consumption of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar at 4 different times of the day. oRRDw
The 3 pie charts exhibit the percentage of the daily intake of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in different meals throughout the day by an average native American. The first two pie charts show the consumption of sodium and saturated fats at 4 different times and also it can be noticed that an average American consumes a maximum of both the ingredients at dinner, but the consumption of sodium is constant at snack time and breakfast. Correlating the intake of sodium and saturated fat to that of the added sugar the consumption of the latter is very high at snack time and minimal at breakfast, However, As of sodium and saturated fat consumption is maximum. To conclude this paragraph, it can be observed that on an average an American consumes consumes minimum of all 3 ingredients at breakfast.
The 3 pie charts exhibit the percentage of the daily intake of sodium,
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added
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different
meals throughout the day by an average native American. The
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fats
at 4
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consumption
of sodium is constant at snack time and breakfast. Correlating the intake of sodium and
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saturated
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fat
to that of the
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added
sugar the
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consumption
of the latter is
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very
high at snack time and minimal at breakfast,
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, As of sodium and
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consumption
is maximum.
To conclude
this paragraph, it can
be observed
that on an average an American
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consumes consumes
minimum of all 3 ingredients at breakfast.
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IELTS academic Pie charts show the consumption of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar at 4 different times of the day.

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  American English
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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