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The pie charts illustrate the household expenses made by two different Asian countries namely Japan and Malaysia in the year of 2010. Overall, it can be seen that, both the nations spent very less amount in the health care sector meanwhile, the both countries gave almost equal priority in term of food and others goods and services sectors. As regard of Japan, it accounted 29% of investment in other goods and services whereas, Malaysia spent merely above a quarter on it. As regard of housing, Japan spent roughly above a fifth at the same time, Malaysia expenditure was just above one third in 2010. Additionally, Japan spent 20% and 6% in the sectors of transportation and healthcare which are twofold investment as compare to Malaysia. Conversely, Malaysia spent 27% in food, which is 3% more than compare to Japan.

The pie charts illustrate the household expenses made by two different Asian countries namely Japan and Malaysia in the year of 2010. Overall, it can be seen that, both the nations spent very less amount in the health care sector meanwhile, the both countries gave almost equal priority in term of food and others goods and services sectors. As regard of Japan, it accounted 29% of investment in other goods and services whereas, Malaysia spent merely above a quarter on it. As regard of housing, Japan spent roughly above a fifth at the same time, Malaysia expenditure was just above one third in 2010. Additionally, Japan spent 20% and 6% in the sectors of transportation and healthcare which are twofold investment as compare to Malaysia. Conversely, Malaysia spent 27% in food, which is 3% more than compare to Japan. r09N
The pie charts illustrate the household expenses made by two different Asian countries namely Japan and Malaysia in the year of 2010. Overall, it can be seen that, both the nations spent very less amount in the health care sector meanwhile, the both countries gave almost equal priority in term of food and others goods and services sectors. As regard of Japan, it accounted 29% of investment in other goods and services whereas, Malaysia spent merely above a quarter on it. As regard of housing, Japan spent roughly above a fifth at the same time, Malaysia expenditure was just above one third in 2010. Additionally, Japan spent 20% and 6% in the sectors of transportation and healthcare which are twofold investment as compare to Malaysia. Conversely, Malaysia spent 27% in food, which is 3% more than compare to Japan.
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IELTS academic The pie charts illustrate the household expenses made by two different Asian countries namely Japan and Malaysia in the year of 2010. Overall, it can be seen that, both the nations spent very less amount in the health care sector meanwhile, the both countries gave almost equal priority in term of food and others goods and services sectors. As regard of Japan, it accounted 29% of investment in other goods and services whereas, Malaysia spent merely above a quarter on it. As regard of housing, Japan spent roughly above a fifth at the same time, Malaysia expenditure was just above one third in 2010. Additionally, Japan spent 20% and 6% in the sectors of transportation and healthcare which are twofold investment as compare to Malaysia. Conversely, Malaysia spent 27% in food, which is 3% more than compare to Japan.

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