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The graph gives information about the drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the drinking habits of the US population by age. GEXw
The given column chart illustrate the drinking habits of the United states citizens, based on thier age groups. Overall, the percentage of ex-drinkers were increased  signficant according to growing age. Although who never drinks were decreasing compare to ex-drinkers The highest  proportion of those who never drink nearly two thirds was in the youngsters (16 to 24year group). The proportion was decreasing slightly among age. As in the 65 to 74 age group there were only 40% people whome never drink. However, the percentage of those who had quite drinking tended to increase with age. Only a minority of 16-24 year youngster group were ex-drinker, by contrace to approximate nearly a half. On other hand, heavy drinker faced gradually rose and fall down. The 35 to 44 age groip showes to be the heaviest drinkers approximately more than one in ten of the total. There were an smaller percentage  of those in oldest group as well as in youngst age group.
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column chart illustrate the drinking habits of the
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United states
citizens, based on
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age
groups.

Overall
, the percentage of ex-drinkers
were increased
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signficant
according to growing
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age
.
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Although
who never drinks were decreasing compare to
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ex-drinkers


The highest
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proportion of those who never drink
nearly
two thirds was in the youngsters (16 to 24year
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group)
. The proportion was decreasing
slightly
among
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age
.
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As
in the 65 to 74
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age
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group
there were
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only
40%
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people
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whome
never drink.

However
, the percentage of those who had quite drinking tended to increase with
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age
.
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Only
a minority of 16-24 year youngster
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group
were ex-drinker, by
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contrace
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nearly
a half.

On other hand, heavy drinker faced
gradually
rose and fall down. The 35 to 44
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age
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groip
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showes
to be the heaviest drinkers approximately more than one in ten of the total. There were
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an
smaller percentage
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of those in
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oldest
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as well
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IELTS academic The graph gives information about the drinking habits of the US population by age.

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