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The pie charts illustrate the average intake of three nutrients in four main meals, the overconsumption of which can be detrimetal to our health.

The pie charts illustrate the average intake of three nutrients in four main meals, the overconsumption of which can be detrimetal to our health. kWA98
The pie charts illustrate the average intake of three nutrients in four main meals, the overconsumption of which can be detrimetal to our health. Overall, the vast majority of sodium and saturated fat are consumed in dinner while added sugar is mostly taken in from snacks. By contrast, breakfast provides the least of these nutrients. In terms of sodium and saturated fat, both nutrients are virtually eaten in dinner with 43% and 37%, respectively, followed by lunch which ranks second in the consumption of these nutrients. Conversely, whereas there is exactly the same percentage of sodium absorbed from breakfast and snacks, accounting for 14% each, snacks are richer in saturated fat than breakfast with 21% and 16%, respectively. Regarding added sugar, more than 40% of this nutrient is from snacks which is nearly double the figure for dinner (23%). Besides, the consumption of added sugar in breakfast is slightly lower than in lunch by 3%.
The pie charts illustrate the average intake of three
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nutrients
in four main meals, the overconsumption of which can be
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detrimetal
to our health.

Overall
, the vast majority of sodium and saturated
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fat
are consumed
in dinner while
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added
sugar is
mostly
taken in from
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snacks
. By contrast,
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breakfast
provides the least of these nutrients.

In terms of sodium and saturated
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fat
, both
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nutrients
are
virtually
eaten in dinner with 43% and 37%,
respectively
, followed by lunch which ranks second in the consumption of these
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nutrients
.
Conversely
, whereas there is exactly the same percentage of sodium absorbed from
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breakfast
and
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snacks
, accounting for 14% each,
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snacks
are richer in saturated
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fat
than
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breakfast
with 21% and 16%,
respectively
.

Regarding
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added
sugar, more than 40% of this
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nutrient
is from
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snacks
which is
nearly
double the figure for dinner (23%).
Besides
, the consumption of
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added
sugar in
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breakfast
is
slightly
lower than in lunch by 3%.

IELTS academic The pie charts illustrate the average intake of three nutrients in four main meals, the overconsumption of which can be detrimetal to our health.

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