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The map draws the picture of an island before and after development.

The map draws the picture of an island before and after development. dl88r
The map draws the picture of an island before and after development. In general, most of the details before upgrading still remain after having an island development. Moreover, there are some significant changes after the island revolution. To begin with, before having a modernization, the island only has trees 200 meters from the left side and right. Also, there are two seas one of which is on the top and another is from the bottom of the island. After fostering the island, there is a number of notable shifts. Firstly, on the island, there are lots of accommodations, which are connected with the footpath. The footpath of this island is not only used to connect each accommodation but also leads to the island’s beach and the vehicle track. In addition, a new restaurant and a reception are built, which connect to a pier located under the island. Finally, the beach on the right side has a swimming area after the modernization of the island.
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island
development.
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significant
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revolution.

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before
having a modernization, the
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island
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only
has trees 200 meters from the
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left
side and right.
Also
, there are two seas one of which is on the top and another is from the bottom of the island.

After fostering the
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island
, there is a number of notable shifts.
Firstly
, on the
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island
, there are lots of accommodations, which
are connected
with the footpath. The footpath of this
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island
is not
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only
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used
to connect each accommodation
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but
also
leads to the
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island’s
beach and the vehicle
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track
.
In addition
, a new restaurant and a reception
are built
, which connect to a pier located under the
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island
.
Finally
, the beach on the right side has a swimming area after the modernization of the
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.

IELTS academic The map draws the picture of an island before and after development.

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